Rough Cut and Feedback

Rough Cut from Jemma Goulds on Vimeo.

Feedback -

- 'i liked it but i think you should add a shot of Leanne following Toni to make sure the storyline is clear'
- 'good, intense soundtrack'
- 'your titles need to appear slower so they are readable'
- 'wicked'

-'very good but you need to make the storyline more obvious'

- 'the soundtrack should drop in time with Leanne when shes having her breakdown'

'maybe the happy shots of Toni should be in colour'

- 'some shots are very blurry and shakey'

Changes ; -

By getting the feedback we knew we had to make the plot clearer. We then went out of school and filmed a shot of Leanne following Toni. We used various camera shots. Including, over the shoulder and Match on action. We thought this shot would display Toni’s cluelessness to Leannes habits, which would allow our audience to establish character behavior and personality.

As we wanted to previously but didn’t know how it would effect the film, we went ahead and changed to whole colour of the last frame. We used a red tint filter, from Adobe After Effects. This scene was very important as, it is were the audience experience Leannes breakdown, We wanted to keep the theme of red, as it connotes , danger as well as love. We also believed this made the whole frame look mysterious and more effective as it played as a sort of insight to her mind.

As our titles had sped up for some reason in our Audience testing, we learnt how to slow them down so they were legible. We kept the effect as we thought it heightened the atmosphere and represented our genre well. We added the final touch of the polaroid’s that I had been editing and trying out. These entered in the titles and showed images of Leanne and Toni, which we hoped allowed the audience to identify the relationship between the character and who they were.

We adapted and edited the soundtrack so that it flowed better and it ended up having a much better impact on the film. Although the audience had commented on the blurry effect we, personally agreed that it added something to the film and was and effect worth keeping. It may of shown the characters mindset as blurry and confused. It was a brilliant mistake that led to there being more mystery and anonymity on the screen.

We finally added the voice over once performing many tryouts with us each. The sentence in itself, wraps up the whole film and also reveals the reasoning behind the behavior of the character in previous shots. We thought this was very engaging and compliments the content and effects of the last frame.